Dudley's dungeon
Friday, 21 March, 2008 |
by Antheridium |
drink what? m - a
of levitation
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You gain control
over your movements.
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# # ###
# #####
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You crash to the
foggy surface!
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@?## ## #
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# # ###
# #####
@ "What the...!?"
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q - a of
sinking
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#@## ## #
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# # ###
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@ "..."
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Average rating: Fair Number of ratings: 14
Comments
Xero Storm |
March 21, 2008 01:38
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First comment: 24 February, 2008 |
32 comments written |
I think I know what you're getting at, but the presentation leaves a lot to be desired. |
gneek |
March 21, 2008 01:41
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First comment: 18 January, 2008 |
159 comments written |
I do not get it. Like at all. |
Callie |
March 21, 2008 03:23
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First comment: 16 July, 2007 |
31 comments written |
Wouldn't one have to read the for it to work? |
Slowpoke |
March 21, 2008 03:34
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First comment: 27 February, 2007 |
239 comments written |
"You gain control over your movements"?!? As in, ewwww? |
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March 21, 2008 08:37
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First comment: 1 April, 2004 |
431 comments written |
As I got it, it's an air plane version of the old levitation+sink joke. As in, if you levitated over a sink, you'd crash. Same thing in air plane, except with a stinking . |
Drizhen |
March 21, 2008 10:58
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First comment: 21 February, 2008 |
20 comments written |
Meh. I liked it. |
T-Jack |
March 21, 2008 11:56
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First comment: 16 March, 2008 |
52 comments written |
I dunno. It's not a bad idea, but I agree the presentation could be better. Also, what exactlz does the SINKing ? |
Antheridium |
March 21, 2008 18:33
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First comment: 17 May, 2007 |
442 comments written |
Heh. This is why I don't submit comics. |
Xero Storm |
March 21, 2008 18:48
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First comment: 24 February, 2008 |
32 comments written |
That's circular reasoning, though. If you never submitted this comic, you'd never have known there was anything wrong with it. Anyway, I think I've pinpointed what's wrong with it:
1) The first panel has to go, and maybe the second. It's just getting in the way of the real joke. If you're moving around on the Plane of Air, the presence of levitation is inherently implied anyway. And either way you're still floating, since there's no ground.
2) If the is the cause, then he should be directly over it when he falls. Incidentally, this would be a reason to keep the second panel, as you'd want to show the presence of the before Dudley moves over it. |
Slowpoke |
March 21, 2008 18:55
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First comment: 27 February, 2007 |
239 comments written |
Oh, sinking. I did not see the difference until it was blatantly pointed out in these comments. Learn To Read, I have been told repeatedly. |
Antheridium |
March 21, 2008 22:05
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First comment: 17 May, 2007 |
442 comments written |
Right, then. The joke that was kicking around in my head was a ' of sinking ' that would create a that acted like a sink. Presumably such a has already been read, and has replaced the normal fog bank with a special that would be very inconvenient for a traveler on the plane of air. The only reason it IS on the plane of air is because you don't see normal clouds anywhere else, that I'm aware of. I suppose I could have done it in the dungeon anyway ("Huh? What's a doing here?" or "Oh , not that rain again"), but there's no particular reason for him to be levitating over it there.
Also, it's possible to be on Air without levitating - if you're something that can fly, for instance. Not that that's common, but I figured I should make it absolutely clear that he was levitating, and the "gain control of movements" message indicates Plane of Air as opposed to somewhere else with a bunch of # symbols. Yes, perhaps those things could have been inferred, but how confusing would it have been to start right off with "You crash into the foggy surface". Then it would have been rated even worse.
Though I suppose you guys didn't bash it as brutally as I thought you would. I appreciate your tact. |
Xero Storm |
March 21, 2008 23:29
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First comment: 24 February, 2008 |
32 comments written |
Ah, but if the had already been read, how would you actually deliver the punchline? And it's not like there isn't a precedent for scrolls that have effects while sitting on the ground. |
Wellan |
March 22, 2008 02:11
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First comment: 27 November, 2007 |
247 comments written |
It's funny, but it's a little awkward. Took me a while to get "sinking ." And shouldn't the first panel say "quaff what?"? |
Antheridium |
March 22, 2008 06:09
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First comment: 17 May, 2007 |
442 comments written |
Well, to be completely accurate, it should say "What do you want to drink", but I shortened it so as not to take up too much space. The game does say 'drink'. (At least for me.) |
Richante |
March 23, 2008 20:23
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First comment: 27 August, 2007 |
32 comments written |
At least the ratings are symmetrical (so far). A good rating spectrum is just as important as a good comic. |
Antheridium |
March 23, 2008 21:12
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First comment: 17 May, 2007 |
442 comments written |
So you see, my comic is the fairest of them all. -. |
Xero Storm |
March 24, 2008 00:17
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First comment: 24 February, 2008 |
32 comments written |
Yeah, because it's not a real Dudley comic unless half the audience hates it. :P |
Oxeye Daisy |
March 24, 2008 20:45
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First comment: 14 November, 2006 |
7 comments written |
What are all those errors at the top of the ? |
jlm |
March 24, 2008 20:56
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First comment: 24 March, 2008 |
2 comments written |
They're to scare off any potential new readers this comic might have gotten.
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MadDawg2552 |
October 9, 2008 18:32
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First comment: 6 October, 2008 |
69 comments written |
If I was on a boat in the middle of the ocean, I certainly wouldn't want to see a sinking , especially one you could crash into. I had to rate this one poor because no one else did. |
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